Friday, April 29, 2011
The Princess and The Frog
The princess was walking down a dark long path through the woods. The trees were tall and full of leaves. As she was walking she came to a little pond. There was hundreds of frogs in and around the pond. She had always heard the story of the princess who kissed the frog and it turned into a prince. She had always wanted a prince so she decided to try it out and see what would happen. As soon as she kissed the big, fat, slimy frog she began to feel funny. She was begging to get shrink. All of a sudden she grew a short, white, fuzzy tail. She grew smaller and smaller until she was only a couple inches from the ground, sitting on her clothes.
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I really liked this story because I could definitely picture this story because of the details you gave about the frog and her growing a tail. I wonder what it would be like if you added more onto this because I like it so far. I wish I knew what happens after this.
ReplyDeleteI like the twist on your story, I would have never thought of the girl turning into a bunny instead of the frog into a prince. I wonder what would happen if you described the the trees more. I also liked image of all the frogs around the pond. I wish I could read the rest of the story!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story, it is really cute so far. I could picture a pond full of frogs and the princess shrinking and her clothes laying on the ground. which I thought was really good. I wish you would have added some more detail. I wonder what your story would have been like if you kept writing, I would have loved to hear the ending.
ReplyDeleteI like it so far i like how instead of the frog becoming a prince the princess turned into a bunny :). I wish you would expand your vocabulary and more detail it was kind of dry on detail. I wonder how your story would improve if did those things.
ReplyDeleteMikayla! WHY DID YOU STOP?! This is really good! I love how you took a classic story and changed it around. What does she turn into? I wish there was a little more detail. Other than that, it was very good. (:
ReplyDeleteMikayla, I love the twist on a familiar fairy tale! I wonder what would happen if you kept going and what would happen next - because you have established a clear problem/conflict for the princess. I wish there were more details about the princess & about the scene because I feel like I need more help seeing her & think the contrast between her before & after would really be fascinating. Nice start!
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